storytellers

spoonfedsoprano · Scribe Joined: 16 Feb 2008 Posts: 14 Location: KSC

STILL WATERS
I may seem like still waters just flowing on the surface
But my rivers are running deep inside
I can't believe how captivated I am just by you
In awe, I europhoria, in disbelief that someone has spellbound me
I've never been swept off my feet
and I just can't believe that it has happened to me
My heart can't comprehend the sighs that I have for you
I just don't understand deep inside how anyone could have a hold on me quiet like you
Just feeling a foreign feeling that I don't think I felt before
And just by your kindness and listening
drew my heart to you
I myself cannot handle my own intensity for you
Just chills deep within me by the looks you give me
By your smile on your face
By who you are

eleison · Posted: Mon Mar 03, 2008 11:39 pm Post subject:

Beautiful, I love how the watery feel "flowed" through all of the poem. I managed to visualize an undercurrent thoughout most of it.

As I said with the last piece of yours I read, you have a real knack for the words I just wonder at why you set up your lines the way you do...
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