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Thalya · Posted: Thu Dec 20, 2007 5:22 pm Post subject: Stormy

Before you begin, i must let you know that this was a creative writing assignment to take a cliche and use it to write a short scene. i chose 'It was a dark and stormy night."

Stormy:

Black clouds loomed over the small town. The pounding rain crashed down upon every surface. The tall grass were whipped back and forth, side to side, by ferocious winds. Roaring out of control, the wind sent leaves flying and snapped branches off trees.

Every few minutes the sky would flash brightly from its gloom as lightning flared out of the clouds. Following shortly after, came thunder claps as loud as bombs blasting a battlefield and drowning out other sounds. Then came the pounding on the roofs again like tiny little fists angrily trying to get in the houses. Harmonizing with tiny fingernails drumming crazily on the window panes.

Intricate_Icicle2197 · daydreamer Joined: 10 Dec 2007 Posts: 41

I love the description. There's enough so it doesn't go overboard but at the same time, you get it. :3 Yay for cliches! :D
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Thalya · Posted: Mon Jan 21, 2008 2:38 pm Post subject: Intricate_Icicle2197

thank you very much

AmbrMerlinus · Posted: Mon Jan 21, 2008 5:37 pm Post subject:

Did you ever do anything more with this?
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Thalya · Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2008 5:02 pm Post subject:

AmbrMerlinus:

no i havent done anything else with this

jesse · daydreamer Joined: 29 Jan 2008 Posts: 33

Great description! Two things: "grass" is singular, and thus it should be "grass was whipped," and the last sentence is a fragment that could easily be attached to the preceding sentence.

<3

-Jesse