You treat your dialogue with the same spirit as your descriptions and the flavoring was so rich I could not notice a change of tone at all in switching between the too.
I love the line "Men should stay out of the house as much as possible. The kindest thing they can do for a woman is to leave her alone.” - it really does sound very much like a gem from a wise woman to me. _________________ Everywhere I go I find that a poet has been there before me.
~Sigmund Freud~
id have to say that its perfect this way, i think that if you add too much description it would take away from the conversations meaning. a little description might be nice but keep it small and "simple" if you know what i mean
I like it like this. Sometimes dialog can be as descriptive as anything. I do like it. My only question would be, where is the storyline going. I mean i know it's only the second part of the intro, and now that I have a good feel for both the characters I want to know what they're about interms of what they want.
I'll be excited to read more! _________________ “Fixed fortifications are monuments to man's stupidity.” ~General George S Patton Jr.
I love this story so much It's okay that you don't describe the scene anymore, because it's taking place in the same area we've already seen, so we can concentrate on the characters more. It works really well!
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