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New Hades (Part Two)

This is the beginning of a new storyline, of sorts, in "New Hades". I hope you all enjoy this as much as the first part. Please let me know if I should be changing anything.

Ripples

The old MacJay house became a beehive of workers- plumbers, carpenters, painters, roofers- in the month leading up to the new family’s arrival. Mr. MacJay was long gone by that point, so it was assumed that the newcomers were in charge of this flurry of repairs. I suppose it was a good idea to get the bulk of the work out of the way before actually moving in. Avoiding the pitfalls of the previous owners and whatnot.

Understandable for them, but what about sleepy New Hades? What about us? For so long, quick change was practically mythology. And yet, in just a few weeks the house was standing fairly upright and its formerly aged face seemed nearly as glossy and flawless as new.

It was changing everything. They were changing everything. Rippling outward, repairmen and landscapers were arriving at other houses- though, admittedly at a slower pace. House by house, family by family, tired old New Hades was waking up from a long slumber- and I, for one, was not sure if I knew or even liked this waking beast.

I had made my way through the doodle-ridden content of Sammy’s notebooks within the first week of renovations. Most of them were, as I had suspected, school notes. Full of math problems and essay drafts. Nothing too impressive, Sammy herself seemed bored with them, judging by the faces she drew in the corners and the perverted comments and puns she occasionally wrote about whatever she was studying.

A few held short, existential stories that seemed to hold little, if any, basis on the life of the girl I had known. They were good, I guess, those stories- but they were not what I had wanted. Some sign that she would have wanted me to have them. A journal would have been nice, the obvious choice. Something representative of her New Hades. A note, even, folded between some pages of long division. Anything that would serve as proof that what was already beginning to haze over in my memory actually was.

That was what made it so upsetting to see New Hades start to pull itself together. It was like the Ferrises all over again- only faster. A way of life, a dynasty of sorts, was ending with no documentation of its lifespan.
GeneralArnold77

I liked how we built up to what the notebooks held in it, and then it wasn't really anything earth Shattering. I have to say I wasn't disapointed. It was really good! Can't wait for more!

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