Lilith
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Zerker - WIPSome of you have heard this, some of you have read this, but hey, I'm still working on it so up it goes! Lemme know what you think, hate, love, spit on, ok?
Clasping the pocket watch in her hand, she closed her eyes. Shana had a habit of shutting off the world when a thinking session was due.
Today, it was a special case, just as many of them had been before. She had been fighting with her parents again. Too many cases were in the special file. Not a good sign.
She opened her eyes again, surveying the room. It'd been ransacked the day before by her mother. Clothes neatly put away, books straightened, bed made, the love-seat actually had it's blanket and pillows strewn in a classy manor on top.
Disgusting.
Even the desk and dresser's had been organized and straightened, how would she ever find anything? Shana rolled her eyes, her mother really did know what strings to pull when irking was her one goal.
She sighed, walking gently over to her bed, promptly pulling the sheets and comforter off, bunching them into a massive fluffy ball, and throwing it down the end of the queen sized bed. Perfect, she thought.
Shana knew she couldn't start on anything else that night. Her eyes were still stained with tears. Her body felt heavy and she still had somewhere to be.
She pulled out the watch again, eyeing it for a moment, and clapping it shut again. Time to go, she thought. Moving towards her window, Shana turned, surveying the room. She'd need to do a bit of extreme cleaning when she got back, everything was all out of place.
She laughed to herself. Just like me, she thought.
Shana opened the window, stepping out into the cool, dry night. Looking over her shoulder and shutting the window. Waving goodbye to all those who actually cared; mainly her stuffed animals.
Turning back around she padded across the roof, trying not to slip. The old slate shingles were slippery from midnight dew. Stumbling a few times, Shana found her balance, taking a sort of predetermined path over the rocky roof and down the side of her parent's porch.
She turned back in the driveway, one last time. She sighed, almost happy to be leaving after that last little excursion. Closing her eyes, she turned, facing the wood behind her house. A tiny patch of stalwart freedom, that it was.
Shana walked onward, hoping to meet up with Viv at the right time. She took out the watch, looking it over, deciding she should be just on time unless mauled by a bear. Lest she be mauled by Viv when she actually arrived.
The forest was in a state of stasis this time of night. Just past one in the morning, it stood still, no birds, no insects, no woodland night prowlers of any kind. Odd, but a little justified. After all, even night critters need their shut-eye.
Shana pressed forward, ignoring the fact that her legs felt damp, tramping through dew-laden brush. She caught sght of the familiar old elm tree, ancient, gigantic and proud, the last bastion of beauty centralized in the forest. Shana could hear the creek mumbling about just beyond; the pool where it met the mighty tree's roots, that was where she would wait.
Just as she settled herself, a welcome voice shouted to her, "He stranger!"
Shana turned, seeing Viv striding towards her in that lanky way she does. Like a woman walking on stilts, Viv was so tall she didn't need them.
"So," she started, "How do you like the view so far?" Viv motioned to the pool built up in the creek, a great silvery orb hung jeft to the left of its center.
"It's nice." Shana replied.
"Nice? You've been fighting with 'rents again, haven't you?" She lay a hand on Shana's shoulder, turning her to meet a bear hug. "It's ok, tonight is something special." She waved at the pool again.Shana sighed in her arms, although comforting, Viv was just a little too strong for her, those great long arms were crushing when they probably ought not to have been.
Viv released, thankfully, walking towards the water's edge.
"Tonight! Our escape shows itself for the first time!" Viv swiveled to meet Shana's stare. She smiled at Shana, who couldn't help but smile back, there was just something about Viv, no matter who she smiled at, they'd always send it right back at her with a homely grin.
"Tonight!" Viv started again, "We witness who we are! Who we've always wanted to be!" She looked over into the pool, now beginning to glow, slightly, the orb was almost to the center.
Shana looked up, eyeing the moon casting it's image down into the water.
"Tonight, oh yes tonight," She paused, mostly for dramatic effect. "We escape this crappy world, on this eve, the full moon! We leave for a life of adventure! A life we've always dreamed of!"
Viv threw her hands up, shouting at the top of her lungs, the moon hit the center of the pool, reflecting an endless shimmering glare. "Tonight we live for the first time in all our short years! We leave this world not for ourselves, but who we should be!"
Immediately, everything went white. Shana thought she was going to puke, it was like pressure squeezing her insides, twisting them into gnarled masses and smashing against walls of unseen bricks.
"Don't be afraid, Shana!" Viv cried, somewhere in front of her. "It'll only last a second!"
She was right, it did only last a second. But something was wrong, everything went from white, to black.
Shana stumbling, hitting something in front of her, hard. She tumbling over it, hitting something else, also hard, making a loud crashing noise she thought could wake half the planet. Assuming they were still on a planet.
"Viv!" She shouted, half whimpering, her shoulder really hurt. Shana whacked it on both unseen objects. Throbbing, she clutched it, trying to stop the pain. But it was already subsiding.
That's a new trick, she thought. Her head felt like it was in a washing machine. Round and round it went, she could feel solid ground just underneath, but her head decided it was just going to float off somewhere else for a while. Completely aware that her eyes were open, Shana decided it was night. Everything was black to her, although it was a strange, ink-like black. Not exactly pitch, but not exactly something you want to experience after just having everything go white.
Usually that meant you were blind.
Shana didn't like that idea one bit, she rather enjoyed being able to see. Tiny marks, almost forming quadrilaterals, that was it. Everything else was utterly black.
"Viv!" Shana cried again, sounding far more desperate than the last attempt. Shana wrapped her arms around her, starting to sob, sinking to her knees. She didn't like it here. Viv was apparently gone, she was now blind, and in a place she didn't know. But she couldn't tell, mostly because she could hardly see. Tiny blueish lines, that was all. Maybe they were buildings, maybe they were a horizon line, but they certainly weren't something familiar, she thought.
Feeling around with her hands, Shana couldn't find any edges. No buildings, nothing. not even grass, or weeds. Just a hard surface, sort of rough, almost scraggy really.
She started to sob more. Shana resolved to sit there as long as it took for Viv to come and find her. Which wasn't long.
A pair of arms gripped around Shana's body. Squeezing her chest. She knew immediately who it was.
"Viv!" she sobbed, guessing that she stood behind her, turning, hugging her. Apparently she was sitting, Shana could feel her chest.
"Well, stranger." Viv squeezed once more for good measure. "If your face wasn't the same, I don't think I would've thought this hottie was you." She laughed, Helping Shana to her feet.
"Why were you just sitting there?" Shana imagined Viv's hands had met her hips by now, the way they always did.
"It's dark out, I can't see." Shana wiped her eyes. Staring where she thought Viv stood.
"Ummm..." Viv sighed, a bit to the left of Shana's blank gaze, "I hate to break this to you, but..." She hesitated. A look of something close to pity on a face Shana couldn't see, Viv was almost glad she couldn't, for the time being. "It's as noon time here. I can see just fine."
"What?!" Shana shouted. "No, that can't be!" She started crying again. "That's not fair, I don't wanna be blind!" She sank to her knees again. Clenching the fabric of whatever she was wearing. A cool breeze brushed her stomach, midriff of course. At least her clothes were still the same.
Shana could hear Viv pacing. Quick steps on stone echoed around her. "Well..." Viv whispered, "Maybe..."
"Maybe what?" Shana asked.
"Maybe you're... one of those."
"That's so specific, it kills me." Sarcasm dripping from her voice, Shana sat in her place, arms folded, slightly annoyed with Viv, tears still coming at steady intervals.
"Get up." Viv grabbed her hand.
Thats it for the first part, the next part will come soon.
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eleison
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Alright, I'm just going to take notes as I go along:
-Still love that ransacked = tidying, how "teenaged"!
-"those who actually cared; mainly her stuffed animals." GENIUS
-Just as she settled herself, a welcome voice shouted to her, "He stranger!"
Typo? Should be "Hey stranger!"
-Love Viv's dramatics
-oooo... suspense!
Okay, pooey on you for saying this wasn't going to be good. YOU ARE A HORRID LIARFACE. This is really, really good and I will now tell you why:
I should be bored of teen-angst by now and somehow, with this piece, I'm not.
Also, you are a master of magical realism.
Honestly, I haven't found anything to complain about as of yet.
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Lilith
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I try to make it somewhat believable, even if its a fantasy setting, ya know?
I'll post the second part soon.
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Intricate_Icicle2197
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I love it just as much as the first time I heard it. ^_^
Can't wait to read more. Post soon!!
...Oh wait..
I still have to read Zerker_Druid that you sent me. ^^;;
And again, that whole "the place had been ransacked!" and then you find out it's perfectly organized is hilarious. XD Probably one of my favorite parts that I've heard from the assortment of pieces I've heard from this story. :3
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jesse
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Really quick feedback, since I'm trying to go through everything on this board.
This is an engrossing read. I like that you launch into fantasy without warning, though it did take me a couple of quick rereads of that section to be sure that's what was happening. I'd really like to have more of a transition there, if possible. Viv and Shana's dialogue is great! I'd really like to see you continue this.
<3
-Jesse
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