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eleison · Posted: Fri May 02, 2008 2:06 pm Post subject:

Wow Jesse, just wow.

Great characterization in this last bit, I really love Fiona's character so far. (Della too, but Fiona's the one with the sword so... yeah, WIN.)

I love the way you manage to tell us what feels like a lot in a short amount of time, but also do not tell too much. I cannot help but feel a bad pun coming on in that this is barely the tip of the iceberg here.

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jesse · daydreamer Joined: 29 Jan 2008 Posts: 33

Well, what sort of writer would I be if I gave it all away in the first couple of chapters? ;D

<3

-Jesse
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eleison · Posted: Sun May 04, 2008 10:04 pm Post subject:

The lamest kind!

I'm so glad you're not lame.
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Everywhere I go I find that a poet has been there before me.
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