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spoonfedsoprano
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 21, 2008 1:34 pm    Post subject: Evaporate Reply with quote
EVAPORATE
I feel like I'm going to melt
Evaporate
Disappear
Every time I think of you
Drowning in the bliss of you
I can't contain
Like an overflowing cup
that wants to be released
But I can't
I'll just have to wait for you
Wait for the blessed moment
Feeling so much inside that I can't understand
My breath is short with the thoughts that I can't control
Can't control what you are doing to me
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 18, 2008 8:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I suggest using "cannot" instead of "can't".
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